Hey guys i need some advice on my rhymes?

I got this rhyme that i been working on:





I got six in tha clip and bout to get sick, tired of the old me turning those tricks, its time to rise up and take my place, urrbody in tha streets - fear this face, gonna take it to tha big time -fast cars, fast cash 'n fine dimes. 'sides- Im here for a good time not a long time.. So if somethin goin down in these streets - let urrbody know its gonna be me, ill get tha block sold up - get tha cheese from my souljahs, remember when this **** hit it was D - Plan that told yaHey guys i need some advice on my rhymes?
its cliche...but i'm in kinda the same dilemna...all ppl WANT nowadays is cliche...so thats usually what i give em...with the occasional rap that comes from the heart, about real ****. I think rappers nowadays just need 2 find a balance of both thingz, so they stay true 2 who they are...but at the same time, ppl like there ****.Hey guys i need some advice on my rhymes?
it had a little flow to it, but i've heard everything you said before. Bring something new to rap, don't be a copycat.
Yeah,I agree w the previous comment!Super stereotypical!!! It's easy to fall into this,cause most do,but you seem smarter than that.
You hit almost every stereotype about rap. Just throw in a line about swagga and it'll be perfect. Good job!
good but not too good
I loved the last rhyme you had did.


But not this one
you just need an amazing beat to go with that.